poem about love!!!!!

[Shika Aburame]

"i luv her more than the stars in the sky
wen im w/ her i cannot die
our luv is as pure as gold
our lives r about to unfold"
tell me if u like it!!!
the person who i dedicate this to?u kno who u r!^^

[Shika Aburame]

no opinions?

[Santi]

i dont have to say who this is for... you already know... YOU know...


the simplest words

the winter nights, the summer days,
can never take my breath away...
and just this once, dare what i say,
id give my life for you to stay...
ill hold you close, look in your eyes,
and love you truely til i die...
without a word, when theres no more life,
after all the planets do collide...
please shed your doubt, and shake your fears...
i loved you then and will forever my life, my love... my dear....

[Shika Aburame]

ur opinion of my poem....................

[Santi]

"not bad.. could use some help though.. i think you really need to think about how you feel and write about it... and about mine what do you think?"

[Shika Aburame]

good^^

[Nabiki BonesOnikai]

Kyubbi... you need work on the sylables in each verse
but it's pretty good, just try to make it more even

and santi thts great^^

[Shika Aburame]

............

[Nabiki BonesOnikai]

its pretty good though dont get me wrong... just the rhythm is off a bit

[Shika Aburame]

(goes insane)
it is good!!!!!DX

[Santi]

"why thank you very much Nabby i appreciate the words of encouragement i might just write a few more"

[Shika Aburame]

dont tell me mine aint good i thought about it for like a week!!!!!

[Nabiki BonesOnikai]

o.o a week...
maybe you should write something else... im sure you'll do great at it Kyubbi...
something tht possibly doesn't rhyme

[kirino ducky uchiha]

i like both ^^
but on the other hand i was nerver good at giving critasism

[Shika Aburame]

ryhming poems is my passion(goes loopy)

[Santi]

"i came up with mine in like... 3 minutes maybe"

[Nabiki BonesOnikai]

the more you practice the better you'll get i guess

[Santi]

"definetly either that or your just gifted"

[Onikira]

bro you have a romantic side!?

[Shika Aburame]

(hides from deidera)dont make fun of me bro.............

[Onikira]

im not its just shoking

[kirino ducky uchiha]

i wrote one its kinda crapy tho

when u cry
i cry

when u smile
i smile

when u laugh
i laugh

when ur angry
im angry

when ur sad
im sad

when u say "i love u"
i say "i love u too"

when u die
i die inside

when u hurt
i will try and hurt for u

when u go to heaven
ill be there waiting

when u touch me
i touch back

when u kiss me
i kiss u back

when u tear my heart out
i try moving on

and when u say "i dont love u anymore"
ill still say "i love u"

[Shika Aburame]

(hits deidera w/ fire phoenix jutsu)

[Nabiki BonesOnikai]

thts good samia. i like it^^

[Santi]

"i really like it alot baby... it really shows me how much you care.. and i love you so much"

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